Writing Goals

Organization: only one topic per paragraph even if the paragraph is short.

Sentence Fluency: only 50% of my sentences begin with subject verb. Use verbals.

Creative: Use a lot of voice. Also have meanings to characters names.

Monday, April 19, 2010

The weekend party part 2

After all of us ran away, we took a breather in Ryan H’s backyard. So many thoughts were racing through all of our minds. No one knew what to expect from what just happened. That’s when we heard deep breathing and it was coming from the front yard of Ryan’s house. That’s when we spotted the man standing on the road. The light was just perfect so you could hardly see the man. He was walking towards us again, and Ryan tried to open his back door but it was locked. We turned around again and the man grabbed hold of my shirt. I would have screamed for my life but his dirty hand was over my mouth. When Ryan S found two golf clubs on Ryan’s porch he picked them up and tossed one to Jake and the next thing I saw was the man on the ground with two huge bruises on his forehead. If they wouldn’t of found a weapon I would have been gone with man to who knows where. I couldn’t believe it, I was safe.

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