Writing Goals

Organization: only one topic per paragraph even if the paragraph is short.

Sentence Fluency: only 50% of my sentences begin with subject verb. Use verbals.

Creative: Use a lot of voice. Also have meanings to characters names.

Tuesday, April 20, 2010

The weekend party part 3

After that traumatic experience, we went back to Luke’s house. I wish that would have been the last of that horrible man. However, I can never be right. All of a sudden we heard a ring at the doorbell. This time we were prepared. I grabbed a baseball bat, Jake P grabbed another golf club, Joe H grabbed a rusted metal pole, Cal C grabbed some toxic spray from Luke’s closet, Luke took two ping pong paddles with sharpened handles, Ryan H took a butcher knife, and John C took a . We carefully ,quietly went up the stairs and opened the door with caution. We must have took a long time because no one was there. Although we saw the van parked at the end of Luke’s court. That’s all we saw. Suddenly there was a crash that came from the kitchen. We all took control of our deadly weapons and walked very steadily into the kitchen. The back door was open and we heard footsteps running on Luke’s back patio. I ran outside cause I wanted a piece of this old guy. However when I went outside no one was there, not even the white van.

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